I just posted this of F95. Since the creator doesn't seem to be aware of the forum there about his game I am re-posting it here'
like your story, renders and Li's but many concerns otherwise. 1) Dialog indicates you made choices you actually didn't make. 2) Why would you limit how many saves you can make? If we are going to be making choices that affect the game we will need a lot more than that. Renpy games have unlimited saves unless the developer changes it. 3) Unless you are planning on implementing sharing and NTR then Tengen's flirting with Shizu is going to upset a lot of people as she is obviously a Li and it gives off NTR vibes whether you mean it to or not. This is a trap that many new creators fall into. Be very clear in your tags from the beginning or you are going to see a firestorm of controversy in the forums as this is the most bitterly fought topic. A lot of people are going to want to have an answer to that before they decide to support you and any equivocation on your part will be seen as deception or weakness. State clearly that "yes" there will be NTR or "no" there wont if you want a friendly environment here and do it quickly. 4) Why did you put a horse-dick on the MC? I find that to be a complete turnoff. I don't mind when it is larger than normal but it is way too big. He looks deformed. I just don't play games like that because the sex scenes don't excite me. I lot of us look at the MC as our avatar and want to imerse ourselves into the story which means being happy with the body. I've asked a few developers why they do it and the honest one's said because they are lazy and it made it easier for them to do sex scenes. Much as I appreciated their honesty I couldn't support them. 5)I Really didn't like that you made a dream sequence just to throw a sex scene in there. Not a big fan of those but at least I give you credit for making the actual sex in it avoidable if you don't want it. 6) Your Patreon page in not active but it is linked here. If you want monetary support I suggest you fix that ASAP. 7) I agree with many others that if you clean up the dialog it will be greatly improved. I checked Itch.io and found a newer (remastered) version. I skimmed through it quickly and it looks like you fixed some of the discrepancies we had noted here. You should also make it available on F95. Despite all that, I like most of what you have done so far and, with a little bit of work this has potential. I'll check your next update to see what you have done. Please fix the horse-dick!
So far, it is pretty good. I think the premise seems interesting, but I am a bit lost on the story, but I imagine that some of the questions we are left with will eventually be answered. Hopefully, the story becomes clearer as more updates are rolled out. Are there any more girls that we will see in the future ? What are some of the fetishes you plan to include? Great job. I really would like to see what becomes of it. Also, Shizu is adorable, glad you started with her.
Thanks for the support! And yea, as I've replied to some other people, they were also confused, so I am going to go back and add some extra dialogue to clear up some of the questions that people had in 0.1. The remaster should come soon. As for more girls, there will definitely be more. In the stats page at the end of 0.1 there were 2 girls that still have not been introduced and there will be many more! For the spicy stuff I'm not too sure. It would have to be specific towards the relationship and the personality of each character. And yea, Shizu is adorable.
Hey ! Look promising but I must say that at the end of the 0.1, I didn't understand who MC is and why they "nearly killed him". Perhaps due to my choices.
Thank You! A lot of people were saying that so I am going to add a little more information in certain parts of 0.1 Then go into more detail in 0.2 of the whole story.
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Hoping you'll eventually get around to continuing this story. It has potential.
I just posted this of F95. Since the creator doesn't seem to be aware of the forum there about his game I am re-posting it here'
like your story, renders and Li's but many concerns otherwise.
1) Dialog indicates you made choices you actually didn't make.
2) Why would you limit how many saves you can make? If we are going to be making choices that affect the game we will need a lot more than that. Renpy games have unlimited saves unless the developer changes it.
3) Unless you are planning on implementing sharing and NTR then Tengen's flirting with Shizu is going to upset a lot of people as she is obviously a Li and it gives off NTR vibes whether you mean it to or not. This is a trap that many new creators fall into. Be very clear in your tags from the beginning or you are going to see a firestorm of controversy in the forums as this is the most bitterly fought topic. A lot of people are going to want to have an answer to that before they decide to support you and any equivocation on your part will be seen as deception or weakness. State clearly that "yes" there will be NTR or "no" there wont if you want a friendly environment here and do it quickly.
4) Why did you put a horse-dick on the MC? I find that to be a complete turnoff. I don't mind when it is larger than normal but it is way too big. He looks deformed. I just don't play games like that because the sex scenes don't excite me. I lot of us look at the MC as our avatar and want to imerse ourselves into the story which means being happy with the body. I've asked a few developers why they do it and the honest one's said because they are lazy and it made it easier for them to do sex scenes. Much as I appreciated their honesty I couldn't support them. 5)I Really didn't like that you made a dream sequence just to throw a sex scene in there. Not a big fan of those but at least I give you credit for making the actual sex in it avoidable if you don't want it.
6) Your Patreon page in not active but it is linked here. If you want monetary support I suggest you fix that ASAP.
7) I agree with many others that if you clean up the dialog it will be greatly improved.
I checked Itch.io and found a newer (remastered) version. I skimmed through it quickly and it looks like you fixed some of the discrepancies we had noted here. You should also make it available on F95.
Despite all that, I like most of what you have done so far and, with a little bit of work this has potential. I'll check your next update to see what you have done. Please fix the horse-dick!
So far, it is pretty good. I think the premise seems interesting, but I am a bit lost on the story, but I imagine that some of the questions we are left with will eventually be answered. Hopefully, the story becomes clearer as more updates are rolled out. Are there any more girls that we will see in the future ? What are some of the fetishes you plan to include? Great job. I really would like to see what becomes of it. Also, Shizu is adorable, glad you started with her.
Thanks for the support! And yea, as I've replied to some other people, they were also confused, so I am going to go back and add some extra dialogue to clear up some of the questions that people had in 0.1. The remaster should come soon. As for more girls, there will definitely be more. In the stats page at the end of 0.1 there were 2 girls that still have not been introduced and there will be many more! For the spicy stuff I'm not too sure. It would have to be specific towards the relationship and the personality of each character. And yea, Shizu is adorable.
Hey ! Look promising but I must say that at the end of the 0.1, I didn't understand who MC is and why they "nearly killed him". Perhaps due to my choices.
Good luck for the future !
Thank You! A lot of people were saying that so I am going to add a little more information in certain parts of 0.1 Then go into more detail in 0.2 of the whole story.
很棒哟!它会有中文版吗？